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Band 4

people believe that in the future, environmental problems will mean that we are unable to live on this planet. In order to survive, the human species will need to find another planet that can support life. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

There is no denying the fact that the
evironment
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environmental
 issue may
will
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be
problem
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a problem
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people
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for people
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survive
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to survive
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.
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while
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 it is a commonly held belief that some
nation
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nations
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 think
in
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apply
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the
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that
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 future
environment
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environmental
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issue
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issues
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 will mean that we can not live
in
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on
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this
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planet
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so
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, so
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 we have to
looking
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look
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to
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for
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 a new
planet
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 to live
, there
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on, there
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 is
also
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 an argument that
oppoess
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opposes
 it. In my opinion, I consider that we have to work to keep
oure
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our
planet
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safty
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safe
 and clean to help us live .
To begin
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 with, the
imprtant
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important
 thing to keep our
palnet
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planet safety
safty
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 is the cleaner.
In other words
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,
people
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 have to keep
thier
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their
planet
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 clean by
do
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apply
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not miss anything like they drope
the
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apply
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oil into the
oation
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ocean
, the war can play
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a rolue
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rolue
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role
 to miss the
pleant
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planet
 by
kill
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killing
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people
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.
In addition
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,
the
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people
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 should save the
weidlife
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wildlife
.
For example
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,
people
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 should stop
to kill
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killing
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 animals and
cut
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cutting
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 the trees
which
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, which
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 can
made
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cause
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an
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apply
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issue
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issues
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 in
environment
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the environment
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.
Anther
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 point to consider, the
foctorys
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factories
 should be less
to
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esmissions
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emissions
 the carbon. It is
posseble
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possible
 to say that the
foctory palys
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factory plays
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an imprtant
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imprtant rolue
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important role
 to keep our
planet
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safty
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safe
.
Moreover
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,
governmant
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governments
 have to put real laws to decress of envernment problems.
For instance
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, if anyone
kill
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kills
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aunmels
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animals
 or
cut
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cuts
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 the trees have to go to
pesone
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prison for
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 about 5 years, because
he
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they
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 can
harms
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harm
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the
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apply
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wiedlife
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wildlife
.
Inuclusion
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Inclusion
,
depsite
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despite
people
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 having
diffrent
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different
pints
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points
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 of view.
In
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I
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 believe that
people
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 should keep our
pleant
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planet's
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safty
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safety
 by
clenar
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cleaning
,
helthy foctorys
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healthy factories
, and the
givernment
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government
 must
do
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pass
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lwas
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laws
 to
people
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 who kill or cut trees

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structure
Make a plan before you write. Start with a short intro that says your view.
task
State your main view in one line and keep it in all your writing.
development
Use 2 or 3 main ideas in body and give how or why for each.
coherence
Use simple link words to show how ideas fit.
language
Check spelling and grammar and fix common mistakes.
content
You show care for the planet and a wish to keep it safe.
content
You give some ideas like laws and wild life care.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental degradation
  • sustainable development
  • renewable energy
  • carbon footprint
  • biodiversity loss
  • climate change
  • greenhouse gases
  • deforestation
  • pollution
  • habitable planets
  • space colonization
  • terraforming
  • ethical dilemmas
  • resource allocation
  • technological advancements
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