Many people nowadays spend a large of their free time using a smartphone. What do you think are the reasons for this? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Nowadays, the majority of people spend a considerable amount of
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, most of it is a positive development. For starters, most people in their free
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want something entertaining, and
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put that entertainment at their fingertips.
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, whether it be watching a movie or a video, scrolling through social media, or catching up with relatives and friends, people have easier access to that now more than ever.
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, as a
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, we have become
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on the services
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offer us,
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as ordering
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and items, looking up information, and taking notes and pictures, all in a hand-held device.
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, spending a large
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of free
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using
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does have negative impacts.
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, shortening attention spans, losing track of
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and other physical and mental issues.
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, I believe that spending a lot of
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on
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is a positive thing, because
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offer many services and
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that help with the quality of life, making things easier and more practical.
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, paying the bills, sending email, taking calls, purchasing items, sending a text, browsing the internet, capturing a photo or a video are all
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and easy to use in a smartphone. In conclusion, I think that using
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is a good way of spending
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Connectivity
  • Multifunctionality
  • Instant gratification
  • Digital natives
  • Cybersecurity concerns
  • Social isolation
  • Ergonomic issues
  • Technological addiction
  • Virtual communities
  • E-learning
  • Telecommuting
  • Screen time
  • Digital detox
  • Mobile applications
  • User interface
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Information overload
  • Carpal tunnel syndrome
  • Procrastination
  • Phubbing (ignoring someone in favor of a mobile phone)
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