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The line graph shows the sales of gold in Dubai for 12 months in 2002 in millions of Dirhams. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph illustrates the total
sales
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 of gold, in
millions
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 of
dirhams
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, in Dubai throughout the year 2002.
Overall
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,
while
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 the
amount
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 of
sales
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 rose and fell, eventually it
leveled
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levelled
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 out to around the
amount
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 it started with. Notably, March had the highest
sales
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 of the year,
whereas
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 July and
Septemper
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September
 were the lowest. In January, the
amount
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 of gold sold was worth 200 million
dirhams
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, and rose slightly by
Fabruaury
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February
 to just over that number.
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, by March, the figure increased significantly to 350
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millions
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million
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.
However
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, through April, May, June and July, the number fell considerably and reached just over 100
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millions
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million
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. August,
in contrast
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, had an increase of almost double that of July, reaching 200 million
dirhams
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. In
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September
Septemper
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Septemper,
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however
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, the
amount
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 of gold
sales
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 had reached almost 100
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millions
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million
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.
Finally
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, October, November and December had a slow rise to almost reach 200 million
dirhams
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 by the end of the year.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, millions, dirhams, amount with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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