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The chart below shows the percentage of whole world population in four countries from 1950 to 2000, with projections till 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart gives information on the proportion of the global population in
India
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,
China
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, the USA and Japan in 1950 and 2000, and projections for 2050.
Overall
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, most of the countries' percentages are declining over the period, except for
India
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which
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, which
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 shows a marked growth throughout the years. Notably,
China
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 has had the highest figures in the 100-year period. In 1950,
China
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 had approximately 25% of the world population, and showed a downward trend to just under that figure by 2000. In 2050, it is predicted to reach under 20%.
While
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 Japan has a similar trend to that of
China
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, it has steadfastly
remaind
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remained
 under 5% over the period. The USA started at 10% and fell to over 5% by 2000, with projections expecting it
ro
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to
 remain the same in 2050.
However
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,
India
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 is the only country that
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in
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an
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 increase in proportions. Starting at 15% in 1950,
India
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's percentages rose steadily throughout the years to reach just over 20% by 2050.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words india, china with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographic shifts
  • population percentage
  • projection
  • trends
  • increase/decrease
  • laggard
  • steady state
  • global dynamics
  • economic implications
  • social implications
  • environmental implications
  • population trend
  • significant change
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