The charts below show the numbers of people per household in 1990 and 2000 in New Zealand.

The charts illustrate the comparison between government expenditure in 2010 and 2015. The units are measured in percentage.
Overall
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, it can clearly be seen that there are three main sectors
dominate
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that dominate
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the
spending
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spending,
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whether in 2010 or in the next five years. Education
being
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the highest cost that the government have to bear in both periods.
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, the other two fields are healthcare and pensions. In terms of the first year of the chart, education
account
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for 24, healthcare
constitute
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at
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21, and pension
stand
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at 19. Meanwhile, there are 6 other
aspect
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aspects
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that contribute to the expenditure rate. Defence
get
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gets
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17, and the rest are below 10
which
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, which
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are welfare, interest on borrowing, transport, culture-leisure, and other. Regarding the data in 2015, school
related
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field still
have
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biggest
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the biggest
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contribution at 21, health facilities reach 20, and retirement
cost
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costs
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hit 19. The
last
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number for pension
is
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has
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not
change
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from
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since
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2010
,
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;
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it
still
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is still
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the same as before.
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, defence expenditure
decrease
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by 3
while
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welfare
cost
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costs
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raise
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rose
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by 5 from 2010 to 2015.

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