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In many countries, the number of people suffering from stress is increasing. What do you think are the causes of this problem and what measures could be taken to tackle it? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 word

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the main reasons and solutions . Indeed , many people tend to have unhealthy lifestyle which lead to stress , working for long hours and spending their leisure time in traffic and daily responsiblities and ignore good habits ,
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 exercise or going for walk in nature will help them release the pressure ,
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 we can fix that by adding in our daily routine by forcing it or making important ,
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 as paying the gym subscription or having a dog for outdoor activities so can the person get more air and can walk more .. In other hand ,drinking too much caffiene and alcohol will lead to serious health issue and
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 we can change food habits by starting eating healthier and drinking more water will ease the impact of those bad drinks ,
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 trying to reduce coffee intake slowly until is obvious to less drinking ,
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 drinking 2 times a day in first week rather 4 times intake ,
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 it depend on each person
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stress can impact our
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 how less we can be stressed and how much we can be in control , so
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 lifestyle to
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Task response
Add a clear plan. Start with the main idea in one line. Then give two to three strong points for causes and two to three measures. Keep a simple layout.
Coherence and cohesion
Make a better flow. Use linking words like first, then, also, but, so. Put one idea in each paragraph. Check that ideas connect.
Task response
The essay tries to answer both parts of the task: causes and solutions.
Coherence and cohesion
It has an easy to read form, with paragraphs and some examples.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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