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some people believe that planing for the future is a waste of time because they think that focusing on the present is more important. To what extent do you agree or disagree

The topic of whether one should plan for the
future
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 or live in the moment sparks a considerable debate. Personally, I think that
balance
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 is key and that there should be
balance
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 in everything in life.
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 with, some
people
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thinks
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think
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 that doing any sort of
enterntainment
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entertainment
 is a complete waste of
time
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,
time
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 that could be spent on doing something that would benefit them later on in their life,
such
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 as making money. Eventually, they do make money, and
while
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 the entirety of their lives their only focus was on their
future
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, they reach a dead end
were
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where
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 they have all the money in the world, but have zero memories.
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, they reach a stage of being miserable and burnt out .
On the other hand
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,
their
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 are
people
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 who just want to live in the moment and
could not
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couldn't
 care less about the
future
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. They spend all their
time
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 partying, failing their classes, and doing absolutely nothing for their
future
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. Later on, these
people
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 reach a stage in their lives
were
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where
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 they have nothing to their name but their memories, and enter a stage of depression and wishing they
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 go back in
time
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 and do things differently. In both these scenarios,
people
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 wish to go back and do things differently, but it is always too late. Each person should know how to
balance
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 his/her life
,
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 between having a good
time
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,
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 and
between
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being a responsible adult preparing for the
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future
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future,
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 since
balance
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 is key.

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task
State a clear view in one line at the start and keep to it all through the essay.
structure
Give each idea a clear paragraph and use a simple example for it.
coherence
Use small linking words to show how ideas go with each other, like also, but, however, and then.
grammar
Check grammar and spelling: make 'they think', 'there', 'were', and 'entertainment' right.
structure
End with a short conclusion that restates your view.
idea
Your main idea of balance is clear.
content
You give both sides, which shows balance.
structure
Intro shows topic and view.
structure
Conclusion mentions balance.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial stability
  • unexpected expenses
  • career advancement
  • long-term goals
  • structured approach
  • personal development
  • educational goals
  • fulfilling life
  • spontaneous experiences
  • emotional fulfillment
  • embrace opportunities
  • mental health
  • reduce stress and anxiety
  • mindfulness
  • balanced approach
  • flexibility and adaptation
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