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Band 4.5

A year ago, you lent your favourite book to a friend who you thought would enjoy it. Unfortunately, your friend has forgotten to return it. The book has sentimental value to you as it had been presented by your grandmother. Write a letter to your friend. In the letter: ask how he or she is doing remind him / her about the book explain why you need it back

Dear Rana How are you doing these days
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hope you're doing well. How's the college life been with you
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, I wanted to ask you about the book
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 you like it so far? I want a whole feedback about the characters,customs,and how the story ends. I want it back
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 personal reasons. Frankly, it's my grandmother's gift for my 16th birthday
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 it's so special for me, it's the best thing I've ever had.
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, my father
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been always
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 asking me to have that book
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 I'm so stubborn about giving it easily. It's the only thing that I've from her after she died. All the best, Ghuyudh

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task response
You answer the task and stay to the point. Some parts go beyond the task. Try to keep to the asks only.
coherence and cohesion
Make each paragraph hold one idea. Use a full stop to end a sentence. Start a new paragraph when you change to a new idea.
greeting and closing
Friendly start and end of the letter.
tone
You tell why the book means a lot to you.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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