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Different types of environmental pollution seem to be affecting an increasing number of people in the world. What do you think are the causes of this problem and what solutions would you suggest?

In recent years, various
kind
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kinds
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 of environmental
pollution
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 have
become
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increased significantly.More and more
people
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 are
affecting
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on
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by
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 air
pollution
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 and plastic
pollution
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to
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, to
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 name but a few.I will elaborate on
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the resons
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resons
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reasons
 for
this
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 issue and give some
sollutios
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solutions
 to address them in the following essay.    The significant reason for
this
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 problem is that
people
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 are becoming more dependent on vehicles
such
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 as
airplanes
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aeroplanes
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 and private cars. There is no doubt that these types of transportation tools give rise to carbon
dioxie emmision
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dioxide emissions
, which causes
global
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a global
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 threat
on
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 the earth because their usage
are
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 very common nowadays.
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,
people
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 may attach utmost importance to having
luxury
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a luxury
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 lifestyle,
instead
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 of having
the
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an
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 environmentally-friendly one.
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, individuals usually
dont
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don't
 prefer to recycle
in
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apply
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their waste to preserve
environment
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the environment
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or
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, or
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 many
people
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 are not willing to use
cloth
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a cloth
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 bag, in order to reduce the amount of plastic
pollution
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.   To overcome these challenges, the
government
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 and
people
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 should take
responsiblitiy
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responsibility
 equally.
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, the
government
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officals
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officials
 should allocate a budget for combating
pollution
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.
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 is because
,
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 the
government
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 subsidy plays a
centrol
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central
 role in reducing
overall
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enviromental
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environmental
pollution
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, because its
affect
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effect
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 can be
considreable
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considerable
. As to individuals, they should adopt
more
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a more
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eco-friednly
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eco-friendly
 lifestyle and encourage others to
recycling
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recycle
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 and
using
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use
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 reusable products as opposed to plastic ones. In conclusion, there is an undeniable fact that environmental
pollution
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are
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is
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 rising because of
people
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's choices and
frequency
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the frequency
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 of using vehicles, which causes air
pollution
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.
However
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, I opine that when
people
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 and the
government
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 take
step
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steps
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for
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to
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 reduce them,
this
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 will pave the way for having
healthy
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a healthy
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 ecosystem.

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grammar
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structure
Use short, simple sentences and clear links between ideas.
content
Give more facts or details to back each point.
coherence
Choose simple words and stay with easy words to be understood.
strength
The plan is clear: talk about causes and how to fix.
structure
There is an intro and a last paragraph.
content
Some examples are used to show ideas.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Industrial activities
  • Pollutants
  • Air pollution
  • Water pollution
  • Soil pollution
  • Harmful gases
  • Chemicals
  • Exhaust emissions
  • Carbon monoxide
  • Nitrogen oxides
  • Pesticides
  • Fertilizers
  • Urbanization
  • Natural habitats
  • Waste production
  • Deforestation
  • Biodiversity
  • Cleaner technologies
  • Regulatory policies
  • Public transportation
  • Electric vehicles
  • Vehicular emissions
  • Organic farming
  • Sustainable waste management
  • Reforestation
  • Afforestation
  • Ecosystems
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