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Many supermarkets are selling more and more imported foods instead of seling locally produced foods? What are the reasons for this? İs this positive or a negative development?

Local food production was substituted by
a
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foreign ones in a significant number of grocery shops. The main cause for
this
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 situation is the interest of
people
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 to try something
that is
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 not available in their
country
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. I reckon it is the positive one
due to
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 the opportunity to cooperate with grocery companies from the entire world
and
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 there will be
wider
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a wider
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 assortment during the shopping. Having good relationships with international companies was always the strong side of the
country
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that is
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recieving
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receiving
 a product. By involving enormous corporations, the
country
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 illustrates its ability to have successful
negitiations
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negotiations
 with other
ones
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countries
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.
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, more and more foreign suppliers will become interested in the partnership by seeing a good demand
of
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 exported groceries
on
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in
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 the territory of consumer
.
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territory.
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, in
far
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the early
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 2000s when Kazakhstan
got
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gained
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 independence
recently
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and was only beginning to
enhance
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their
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its
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 marketplaces, the company of
Coca Cola
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 became interested in
contribution
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contributing
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.
Beacuse
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Because
for
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at
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 that time, there were
not
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any
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no
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 suppliers of
the
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soda with consistent consumption,
thus
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 by using that situation in the
country
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aappropriately
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appropriately
,
Coca Cola
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 became the most popular drink in
a
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the
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country
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. The variety of supplements in the significant grocery shops was always considerable for the
country
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. Even though local
products
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product
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 suppliers
are deserving
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 the strongest trust from citizens, exported ones will complement the store counters. By buying only local groceries
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people
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, people
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 can be bored eating the food with
the
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same
taste
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food
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.
Genereally
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Generally
,
people
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 are constructed with the desire
of trying
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to try
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 something unfamiliar
for
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them
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and
supply
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a supply
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 of
internetional
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international
 products is required.
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, by having only local chocolate fabric,
people
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 will be able to eat an American
cholocate
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chocolate
 if they fly to America or to the
country
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were
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where
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this
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 type of chocolate is available to buy.
To conclude
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,
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goverment
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government
 should find
the
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a
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 way to
have
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a
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contribution
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contribute
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with
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to
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 foreign companies to
possess
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export
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 a
various
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variety
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 exported food in their own interests.
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Also
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Also,
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 it is important for the convenience of local citizens to have an expanded number of options.

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Task response
State your view clearly in the first part and give clear, easy reasons with simple proof. Try to keep one main idea per paragraph and end with a short wrap.
Coherence and cohesion
Link ideas better. Use small connect words like first, also, and finally to show how your points are tied. Group ideas in order and keep one idea per paragraph.
Strength
The essay shows a real hope to talk about why imports grow in shops.
Strength
You use an example of a big firm to show how market buy can grow.
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