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Nowadays, more and more foreign students are going to English-Speaking countries to learn the “international” language-English. It is undoubtedly true that studying English in an English speaking country is the best way, but it is not the only way to learn it. To what extent do you agree or disagree with it?

Today, many international
students
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countries
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 where
English
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 is the main language for studying
English
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 as a foreign
one
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language
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.
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, it is not only about studying languages
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 I believe that it is
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 about expanding
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' knowledge about
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history
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 and traditions. Today's in
rapid-paced
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 modern society, the young generation
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 to rely
into
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 study.
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, in many
cases
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 they encourage themselves to
enroll
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 in foreign universities to study
English
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. Because teenagers believe that
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 approach can give not only deep knowledge related to language but
also
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 learn about
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'
history
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.
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, it leads to
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English
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 from different perspectives, which helps them
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 personally. One clear evidence for
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 is that
students
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 who are moved for studying to another country and learn
their
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about their
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 museums and
history
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architecture
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and architecture
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 tend to
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be more
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 knowledgeable and feel
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a sense
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 of belonging. Another crucial point is learning
countries
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'
tradition
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traditions
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. When young people become
an
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international
student
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students
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, they try to learn
residents'
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the residents'
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tradition
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traditions
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, which helps them create
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a sense
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 of unity and safety.
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,
this
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 allows student
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to study
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 their subject in a
supporting
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supportive
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 and friendly environment.
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,
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 some people prefer
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 lifestyle, others communicate with local residents, which helps them learn specific details about
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 and their traditions.
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, foreign
students
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 can understand
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English
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the English
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 language not only from books and tutors, but
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 from local people. In conclusion,
while
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 some
students
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 prefer
English
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countries
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 for studying their degree just only for gain
proffesional
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professional
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also can
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can also
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 give different options
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such
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 as learning
countries
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'
history
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 and traditions.

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structure
Make your view clear in the first paragraph.
coherence
Use clear links to show how ideas go from one to the next.
examples
Give one or two strong examples to back up your point.
idea
You show a view that studying in other lands can give more than just language.
content
You mention history and tradition as ideas for learning.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foreign students
  • international language
  • best way
  • alternative ways
  • online resources
  • language exchange programs
  • immersion
  • practical application
  • beneficial
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