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Writing Samples
Band 5.5

Write a letter to the transport officer about a problem with transportation system in your area please say Describe the situation you are facing Why do you consider it a problem? What changes would you like to recommend?

Dear
Mr.
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Mr
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 Farhadi, I hope you are doing really well. It has been
such
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 a long time since we
last
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 spoke. I am writing to express my dissatisfaction regarding the public transportation system in Toronto. First of all, the bus and subway seats have very poor quality , and they are not clean and comfortable enough for people to use.
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, residents are not satisfied with
this
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 situation and prefer to travel
by
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in
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 their own vehicles under the circumstances, which causes traffic overload and more air pollution.
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, bus fare has been increased since January 10th , so people are reluctant to pay for that. To address
this
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 problem, I kindly request
you
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that you
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to
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apply
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repair the seats and follow up to provide a better condition and
reasonable
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a reasonable
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 ticket price for passengers. I look forward to hearing from you. I am waiting for your prompt reply at your earliest convenience. Yours faithfully, Parimah Abdoli

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structure
Try to use one idea per paragraph. Start with the problem, then what you want done. Use short lines.
content
Make your aim clear. Say what you want and why in simple steps.
grammar
Fix small errors in spacing and comma use. Learn the rules for polite letters.
content
Clear purpose to write to the transport officer.
tone
Polite ending and greeting.
structure
Use of linking words like First of all and Secondly.
Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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