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Nowadays, many university students choose to study overseas for part or all of their course. Some people say this should be encouraged because it is beneficial for students and the universities they attend. Do you agree or disagree with this view?

Recently, many colleges in Taiwan provide the chance for
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 to experience a short-term exchange abroad, and
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, some
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 decide to study for their degrees overseas. To my mind, I totally agree that studying abroad can bring lots of benefits for both
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 and schools.
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 are several reasons that can support my view.
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, for
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, it is the best method to broaden their horizons and build up abilities in any aspect. To stay in a foreign country, the most crucial difficulties are adapting to the strange environment and solving
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problem
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, language and the
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 of culture bring many challenges to
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 at first. The foreign
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 should try hard to communicate with local people, figure out many administrative procedures, and immerse themselves
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 the
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 life and local culture. As courses come to an end,
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 will gain many abilities that they would not have learned if they stayed in their hometown, and
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 is not only academic achievement.
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, for the foreign universities, they can accommodate
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 from different nations and backgrounds, which can nurture their
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students
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 and even promote the schools. The local
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 will have opportunities to cooperate and share their ideas with international
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,
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this
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 is an efficient way to learn about other countries and cultures. An international perspective is one of the best advantages for
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. If their
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 are perceived to have
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 character by businesses and
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success because of
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, it will be a unique value to promote the
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 to the world and attract more
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. In summary, I suppose that
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oversea
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 has to be encouraged, it
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not only
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 the capability of the
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 but
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 a competitive key feature to
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. That will deliver benefits to both
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the school
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 and
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the students
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.

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grammar
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content
Add one or two clear facts or real examples to back each idea.
cohesion
Link ideas with simple words to show how ideas fit together.
task
The stance is clear and you agree with the view.
cohesion
There is a good step of intro, body and conclusion.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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