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The table below gives information about rail transport in four countries in 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main deatures, and make comparisions where relevant. Write atleast 150 words.

The table shows information about
rail
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transport
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 in four countries in 2007.
Firstly
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,the highest number of people using
rail
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transport
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 it's
china
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China
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it's
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, it's
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 5.9
percentage
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per cent
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Punctuation problem
. In
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in
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contrast
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contrast,
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 canda the lowest number of
persons
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people
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use
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using
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rail
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transport
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it's
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, it's
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 0.3
percent
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per cent
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in china
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. In China
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passenger
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, passenger
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kilometers
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kilometres
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 per head of population
around
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were around
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 1980km .
While
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,
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apply
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in
canada
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Canada
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,
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passenger
kilometers
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kilometres
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 per head of population it's 80km
Secondly
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,in the same range
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Malaysia
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, Malaysia
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 and
UAE
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the UAE
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 People who use
rail
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tranport
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transport
around
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are around
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 6 million
person
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people
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. passenger
kilometers
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kilometres
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 per head of population in
Malaysia
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around
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is around
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 770 km.
On the other hand
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 ,
UAE
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the UAE
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more
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is more
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 than
Malaysia
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 by ten
killometers
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kilometres
.
To sum up
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,
this
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the
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apply
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Summarise
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summarises
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 information about the
rail
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transport
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 in four countries
we
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. We
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 see the
different
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differences
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 in
chain
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the chain
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 and
canada
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Canada
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also
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 the
near
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nearest
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 numbers for both countries
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Malaysia
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, Malaysia
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 and
UAE
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the UAE
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rail, transport, malaysia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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