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Some cities have vehicle-free days when private cars, trucks and motorcycles are banned from the city center. People are encouraged to use public transportation such as buses, taxis and metro on vehicle-free days. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

In some parts of the world, driving cars and other types of private vehicles is prohibited, encouraging residents to use public transportation.
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 is, to a certain
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degree
, disadvantageous, I believe positive aspects are significant. One downside of car-free days is inconvenience. Given that people are already accustomed to reaching their destination by private vehicles.
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 bans can create a number of issues
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 them, causing to increase a level of stress. Another drawback that should be mentioned is that not all places are reachable by
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. As long as individuals, especially workers, are not capable of getting to their destination on time, they may face challenges,
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 as being fined and
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 in salary.
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,
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 shift comes with notable benefits. One is better air quality. That means of transportation emit hazardous gases to the atmosphere is a fact. When used
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 times, they produce less
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 gases, decreasing the rate of air pollution. Impact on the physical fitness of the population is another upside of
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 prohibition. When banned
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, people have to utilise metros, and in order to catch
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 they walk, which is beneficial for their health.Unlike private cars, commuting by public transportation takes longer hours to individuals, which means that people get up earlier than usual. In conclusion,
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prohibition
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the prohibition
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 of cars can lead to stress and
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 problems in
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, improved air quality and
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 on a person's well-being
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are more essential.
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, I consider that its downsides are overshadowed by
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its upsides
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.

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Make the intro strong with a plan and restate your view in the ending.
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You show a clear view that the good points may be stronger than the bad.
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You discuss both sides, which shows balance.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • vehicle-free days
  • public transport
  • air pollution
  • noise pollution
  • sustainable
  • healthier lifestyles
  • obesity
  • foot traffic
  • community engagement
  • logistical challenges
  • banning vehicles
  • supply chain issues
  • pedestrian-friendly
  • urban planning
  • environmental benefits
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