You wish to study at a foreign university. Write a letter to the university. In your letter you should ask about: the accommodation and fees possible scholarships and the qualifications required for acceptance.

Dear Sir, I am writing
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letter to inform you about my interest in enrolling
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two years
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Master's degree program in computer science at
University
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the University
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of Toronto, Canada, which is one of the reputed
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in Canada. Currently, I am a resident in Doha, and I
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my application process
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online. What's more is, I paid one
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tution
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tuition
fees, which was 10,000 CAD, and I need a
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confirmation
email from you about my payment.
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, I want to inquire about my accommodation at
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, whether my hostel charges are included in my
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tuition
fees or do I need to pay extra ? As
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the
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it shows that if the students
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apply
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scored above 90% in the undergrad, and
also
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got more than 9 CLB in
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langauge
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test,
canditate
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candidates
could be able to qualify for the scholarship, which is 50% off from the actual
tution
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tuition
fees. To be honest, I meet the requirement since I had scored CLB 10 in IELTS and 93% on
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grades in my
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degree.
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, I had already submitted
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copy of my marksheet, which was
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mandatory for getting qualified. I am looking forward to hearing from you in
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matter.
In addition
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, any open line of communication in
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matter would be highly appreciated. Yours faithfully, Jack

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task presentation
State your main aim at once. List the three asks in one clear line.
tone
Keep tone formal. Do not use casual words.
structure
Split the letter into clear blocks: one for fees, one for housing, one for scholarships, and one for acceptance.
greeting closing
Formal greeting and closing are used.
focus
The letter shows aim to join the program and asks key questions.
content
The writer notes he paid money and has some proof, and mentions documents.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Accommodation
  • Fees
  • Tuition
  • Scholarships
  • Qualifications
  • Acceptance
  • International students
  • Course
  • Payment plans
  • Facilities
  • Eligibility
  • Enquiry
  • Dormitories
  • Language proficiency
  • Standardized tests
  • Campus
  • Inquire
  • Criteria
  • Assistance
  • Eager
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