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The use of social media, such as Facebook, Twitter are replacing face- to- face contact in this century. Do you think the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

In-person
meetings
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 are being replaced by other advanced platforms
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 as Facebook, Twitter. I believe
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 trend has more cons than pros. I will discuss
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 in the following paragraphs. On the one hand, definitely online
meetings
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 through websites offer several advantages, like saving people time and allowing them to utilise that extra time in other productive things ,
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 as exercising.
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,
meetings
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 through webinars
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 save money. Because people participating from home through technological devices means not renting a commercial space and no other expenses as electricity bills.
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, during Panamedic, all workplaces were working through Zoom
meetings
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,
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 eventually, they were making more profit because they had zero utility expenses.
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, despite
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 technological advancement, many businesses continue to opt for face-to-face
meetings
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 for various reasons. Like,
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 allows the person to interpret micro behaviours
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 as facial expressions and gestures that help to gauge how interested other people are in the conversation. These non-verbal cues can be used to guide the conversation.
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, if you are in a meeting with a client who keeps checking their watch, you may change the topic to recapture their attention.
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, meeting coworkers and colleagues in person provides a sense of human interaction, which can help build trust because strong relationships are the key to long-term business success.
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,
while
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 online media, like Facebook and
Twitter
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Twitter,
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 could save our time and money, in-person
meetings
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 have more value in creating deeper and more understandable relationships.

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task response
Your view is seen, but it does not stay clear. State your main view in the intro and keep it in the article.
task response
Add more showing of both sides. Give a small, clear point for why some still like in person meetings.
coherence and cohesion
Make each paragraph have one clear idea. Start with a topic sentence and end with a short line.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words to guide reader: first, next, but, also, however. Use them to show how ideas connect.
coherence and cohesion
Keep to simple facts and not long, hard sentences. Short sentences help flow and ease.
structure
The essay has a clear shape with an intro and a conclusion.
strength
There is a view on both sides and a clear stance is shown.
cohesion
There is use of contrast words like 'On the other hand'.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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