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The table below shows the postgraduate course fees in US Dollars that international students paid in three countries in 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The given table illustrates the changes in postgraduate course fees in three countries with
arts
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,
commerce
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, computing,
science
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, and
meals
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 and
accommodation
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 in 2007.
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, the number of postgraduate course fees witnesses a significant fluctuation in three countries. In countries A, B and C, the number of computing and
science
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 was highest,
while
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 the opposite was true in
meals
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 and
accommodation
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.
Besides
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, the data of
science
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 in
Country
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 B more higher than
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Country
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in Countries
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 A and C. In terms of
country
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 A, the number of
arts
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,
commerce
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, and
meals
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 and
accommodation
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 has 8,000
dollars
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 of postgraduate course fees. There were computing and
science
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of
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costs of
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 11,000
Dollars
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.
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, in
the
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apply
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country
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B
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B,
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the figure for
arts
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 and
commerce
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have
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is
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 18,000
Dollars
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. there was computing had 27,000
Dollars
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,
science
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 of 29,000
Dollars
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, and
meals
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 and
accommodation
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 of 17,000
Dollars
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. Regarding the figure for, in
country
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 C , for
arts
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 and
commerce
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 of 19,000
Dollars
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, there were
meals
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 and
accommodation
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 of 11,000
Dollars
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, computing of 24,00
Dollars
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. Ultimately, the cost of
science
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 of 25,000
Dollars
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words arts, commerce, science, meals, accommodation, country, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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