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The plans below show the South Wing of Walton Museum in 2008 and in 2012 after it was redeveloped. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The given maps illustrate the layout of the
museum
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 called the South Wing in 2008 and in 2012.
Overall
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, what stands out from the plans is that
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museum
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the museum
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 experienced major changes,
it
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and it
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 has become more developed. In 2008, the
museum
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 was small with few facilities for its users.
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Museum
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The museum
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 has
basement
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a basement
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 and one
floor
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. In the basement, there
were
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was
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gallery
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a gallery
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in
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on
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 the west side of
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museum
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the museum
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. Shop located near the gallery opposite of
cloak
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room
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. Between
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cloak
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the cloak
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room
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 and
shop
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the shop
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was
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were
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 stairs. Turning to the first
floor
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, there
were
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was
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entrance
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an entrance
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then
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and then
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reception
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a reception
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.
In
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On
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 the east
side
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side,
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 there was
reading
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a reading
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room
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. Since
then
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, the
museum
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 has changed considerably.
While
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, entrance hall, gallery, shop,
reading
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and reading
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room
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 remained intact, the
cloak
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room
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relocated
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was relocated
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 to the reception.
Children’s
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A children’s
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 play area was added
instead
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 of
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cloak
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a cloak
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room
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. One of the most noticeable
change
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changes
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 was
additional
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that additional
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 floors
was
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were
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 constructed.
In the
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The
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 second
floor
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 was for eating, there
were
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was
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terrace
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a terrace
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,
restaurant
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a restaurant
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 and
self-service
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a self-service
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 café. Regarding
to
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apply
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the third
floor
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, there was
exhibition
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an exhibition
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room
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.
Moreover
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, there
was built lift
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lift was built
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.

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task
Task response: Start with a simple intro that restates what the maps show and add an overall idea about the changes. Then describe the 2008 layout in one part and the 2012 changes in another, with a short compare sentence. Keep the intro and overview clear and end with a brief summary.
structure
Coherence and cohesion: Use more linking words to connect ideas. Use clear order: first map then second map. Use short sentences and join ideas with 'and', 'but', 'also', 'then'.
grammar
Grammar and accuracy: check a few verb forms and plural: 'the basement', 'a gallery on the west side', 'cloakroom', 'two floors were added', 'On the second floor there is/was a eating area' (select one tense and stay with it).
content
The essay shows an attempt to describe both maps and to compare.
structure
There is a clear overall change noted and some detail about features on each map.
detail
The writer uses some time cues (in 2008, in 2012) to separate the two plans.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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