The bar chart below show the number of hours each teacher spent teaching in different schools in four different countries in 2001

The bar chart illustrates how many
hours
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teachers have used
while
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teaching in various schools in different nations in the year 2001.
Overall
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, we can see that upper secondary tutors have spent the highest
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of teaching
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,
while
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primary tutors have taught fewer
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.
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, it is noticeable that the USA had the most teaching
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in comparison to other countries.
According to
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the data given, teachers in Japan taught 600
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; the
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increased by around 50
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for Spain, but it decreased to a
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that is
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under 600 in Iceland,
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in the USA, they had almost 750
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. As for lower secondary schools, Japanese and Spanish teachers taught about 650 and 750 students, respectively. As for Iceland,
it is clear that
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they had an exact 600,
whereas
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in the USA, the
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rose by 400, reaching 1000.
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, in high
school
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school,
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Japan had 700, whilst Spain and Iceland shared the same
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which
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, which
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was 900. In America, the
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exceeded
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1200.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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