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The line graph shows the consumption of fast food in gram from 1970 to 1990. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevat.

The line graph gives information about the consumption of junk food in grams , including hamburgers,Fish chips and Pizza , from 1970 to 1990.
Overall
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,the Hamburger and Fish chips had a steep increase,
while
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 Pizza, compared to others, declined step by step. As can be seen from the data, the Hamburger started at just under 100 grams in 1970 and stayed stable until 1975,
then
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 it grew to 100 grams in 1985. After it rose to just over 100 in 1985,
finally
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 in 1990 it
finally
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 significantly increased to 300. Regarding Fish Chips, it was about 100, and
then
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 it climbed just above 100 in 1980. Afterwards, it dramatically rose to 500 in 1990.
In contrast
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, Pizza in 1970 was 300, and at the beginning it decreased to just under 300, but
then
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 it rapidly dropped to 200 in 1985, until 1990 it stayed stable.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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