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Band 3

teachers are more influential than parents in shaping a child's future do you agree or disagree

Nowadays,
majority
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 of
population
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the population
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consider
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considers
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alternative
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an alternative
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 form of education is
home-schooling
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homeschooling
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.
While
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 others believe teachers are not responsible for shaping
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 future .
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 partially agree to some extent .I think parental involvement in education
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 important.
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 the one hand, some
parents
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 decide to educate
children
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 at home .
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 is because home-schooling allows
parents
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 to design a tailored
curricukum
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curriculum
ensuring
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, ensuring
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 that
children
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 learn at an
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 pace.
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,the
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integration of
real life
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real-life
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 skills into lessons promotes holistic development beyond traditional academic subjects.It provides educational flexibility and allows
children
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 to
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follow
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 a tailored curriculum that suits their needs.
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 the other hand,
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some
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famolies
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families
 live in isolated areas with poor education
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, or
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 most
parents
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 do not have time to educate their
children
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 at home.On that stage
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children
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, children
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 may benefit from
fallowing
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following
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 public
schools
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.Another
drawbacks
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drawback
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 of
home-schooling
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homeschooling
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 is
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parents
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that parents
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 can not provide
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the
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necessary knowledge or resources .
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all individuals are not live nearly as
same
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the same
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as
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condition
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conditions
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.Taking into account the economic disparity
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,
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children
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 should go
public
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to public
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schools
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.
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 ,
on
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 public
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schools
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schools,
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 home-schooled
children
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 may lack social skills.
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term
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term,
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 they can not learn how to get on with each other. In conclusion, most
parents
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 choose public
schools
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 to attend their
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children
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children,
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while
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 others prefer
to
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individualized
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individualised
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 learning pace.
they
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They
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 think that they can design a tailored curriculum that
matchrs
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matches
 their child’s interests and abilities

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grammar
Fix many spelling and grammar errors to make your meaning clear. Use short, simple sentences.
task response
Say your view clearly in the first paragraph and keep it steady through the task.
structure
Use a simple plan: intro, two body paragraphs, then a short conclusion.
content
Give a few clear examples to back up your points. These can be simple real life ideas.
vocabulary
Use common words from the top 100 list. Avoid long and hard words or wrong words.
task response
The essay tries to show both sides of the topic.
coherence
There is an intro and a conclusion.
coherence
Ideas are linked with some simple connect words.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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