‘Healthcare should always be funded by governments, and it should always be free for people to use.’ To what extent do you agree or disagree with this idea?
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should always be free to use it by people. I firmly agree with
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, some people don't have much money to buy medical supplies
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residents are required to pay large sums of money for treatment.
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Your view is clear, but you need more ideas to show how the health system should work. Add 2 or 3 reasons and a short compare with how it is now.
Link your sentences easy. Use words like also, and, but, then to make the flow better.
There are many spelling mistakes. Check words like Nowadays, governments, take care of, medicines. Use simple, correct spell.
Try to use a short ending. Restate your view in a final line.
Use a few real examples or facts that show why free health care helps people.
You give a reason about costs of medicine.
Include an introduction and conclusion
A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.
The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.
The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:
- Summary
- Restatement of thesis
- Prediction or recommendation
Example:
To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.
Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:
- In conclusion
- To conclude
- To summarize
- Finally
- In a nutshell
- In general