Some people believe that museums should return cultural artefacts to their country of origin. Others argue that it is better for these objects to be kept in international museums. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

There is a huge debate in public
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whether the international museums should return
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the cultural
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to the original countries. Some arguments indicate that cultural items must be returned to where they come from,
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the opposite opinion
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that it is better for the international
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to hold them. On the one hand, dozens of museums
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keep the foreigners’ traditional
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because of the early conquering
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is often treated as violence and
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. It is a shame for most
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the
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sovereign
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to let their precious in the foreigners.
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, returning those
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is a
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of recovery and must be done in today’s civilization society to undo the violence in
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history.
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, the
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of the United Kingdom returned the precious
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items to
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China in order to
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for the
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in
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history and in return, the collaboration between the two countries
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sustainable for decades.
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, there are
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that the international
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should keep these objects
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for preservation and protection. In fact, some
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were built
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time ago, even for thousands of years, which makes them delicate. The situation of these objects implies that each action must be taken after
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to avoid possible destruction. Moving from one country to another is definitely not wise because of the overwhelming risk it
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. It seems to be a choice that the international museums, for preservation, hold the objects in order to avoid
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damage.
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, there are
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made of
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in the
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of the great kingdom
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it
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been damaged a lot. Any casual movement would certainly
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them into pieces of rocks. From my perspective, the only reason that the international
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has the authority to keep those items is for preservation. Any other excuses should be treated as an
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of the
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facts and should be blamed in
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the civilised
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society today.

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Task Response
Explain both sides well and give a clear, strong own view. Use more specific, real examples and show how they support your point.
Task Response
Make the view balanced. Do not show bias to one side. End with a clear line that states your view.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use clear linking words to show how ideas are linked. Start each paragraph with a topic sentence and end with a short wrap-up.
Coherence and Cohesion
Keep sentences simple. Use short links and avoid long, hard sentences.
General
Check grammar and spelling. Use simple words and fix tense and plural errors.
Strength
The essay has a clear plan: intro, two body parts, and a conclusion.
Strength
It states a position in the end.
Strength
It shows an effort to discuss both sides.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
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