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access to clean water is a basic human right. Therefore every home should have a water supply that is provided free of charge. do you agree or disagree.

Water
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 is the basic necessity of
life
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 for every organism living on
earth
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Earth
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. Human
life
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 is
most
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the most
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 important
life
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 on earth
so
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, so
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water
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 is their most common and basic
reqirement
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requirement
. So it is very important to provide
water
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 to every Human home without any charges. I highly agree with
given
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 statement.
Firstly
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,
water
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 is the most important thing for
human
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the human
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 body other than
any thing
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anything
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, so
ever
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every
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person
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person,
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either
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whether
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 he is rich or poor,
he
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apply
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need
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needs
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 it. So if it is not free for all
people
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, there will be many residents in many countries who will be unable to buy
water
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according to
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 their
need
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needs
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.
For example
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, a
person
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 whose monthly need of
water
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 is approximately 240
liters
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litres
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 just for drinking
and
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, and
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 he can afford only
few
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a few
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liters
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litres
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,
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moreover
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moreover,
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 he
also
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have
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has
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 to do laundry, shower, cooking and dish washes and many other tasks with
water
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.
Secondly
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, Human
heath
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health
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depend
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depends
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 almost 90
percent
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per cent
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 on
water
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. If fresh
water
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 is available for
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humans
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human
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human,
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 it is
important
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an important
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 source for
good
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a good
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 and healthy lifestyle. So
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due
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, due
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 to charges or cost of
water
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people
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, people
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 will try to consume less
water
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 than their required need
as
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, as
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the
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a
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result
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result,
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 they will get sick and become dehydrated. It will
also
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 cause skin problems and hair loss in many
people
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. In conclusion,
water
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 is
life
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of
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for
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human
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humans
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so
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, so
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 it should be free of cost for everyone so that every
person
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 can do all
his
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their
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works
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work
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 without only hustle.
Moreover
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 government should
also
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 spread awareness to
people
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 that they should use
water
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 wisely and
don’t
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not
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 waste it. It should be in knowledge
of
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to
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 every
person
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 that on earth we have only one
percent
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per cent
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 fresh
water
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.

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grammar
Use short, clear sentences. Fix big errors in grammar. This will help stay easy to read.
structure
Keep a clear plan. Add a short intro, two or three main ideas, and a short conclusion.
content
Give more facts or examples. This will make your point stronger.
coherence
Link ideas with simple words like 'first', 'also', 'but', 'then', 'so'.
content
Clear stance on the topic.
coherence
Good use of transition words such as 'Firstly', 'Secondly'.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • basic
  • human
  • right
  • water
  • supply
  • provided
  • free
  • charge
  • agree
  • disagree
  • health
  • essential
  • sick
  • diseases
  • supports
  • education
  • children
  • focus
  • learning
  • searching
  • better
  • futures
  • reduce
  • poverty
  • families
  • save
  • money
  • spend
  • important
  • needs
  • promote
  • equality
  • chance
  • access
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