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The diagram below shows the process of recycling aluminium cans. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The picture describes what happens to
cans
Use synonyms
 after use.
Overall
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, it is
cyclical
Correct article usage
a cyclical
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 process consisting of five important stages, beginning with
the
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apply
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the throwing of
cans
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 into the bin and boxes and ending with the ready
cans
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 for
drink
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drinking
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.  At the beginning of the process,
cans
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 are thrown into the trash bin and boxes.
Next,
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they are moved by a machine. Once the
can
Correct subject-verb agreement
cans
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has
Wrong verb form
have
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 been delivered to the recycling centre,
it
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they
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is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
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 made into blocks. After making blocks,
Use synonyms
aluminium
Correct article usage
the aluminium
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 recycling plant stage
is start
Wrong verb form
starts
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. The blocks of old
cans
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 are melted down
and
Punctuation problem
, and
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 it
is
Verb problem
apply
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gets new
aluminium
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.
From new
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New
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aluminium
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are
Correct subject-verb agreement
is
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 made
thin
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into thin
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aluminium
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roll
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rolls
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. In the next stage, from rolls are shaped into
cans
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. These
cans
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 are
labelling
Verb problem
labelled
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.
At the end
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 of the cycle, ready
cans
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 are prepared for selling in
drinks
Correct article usage
the drinks
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 machine. 

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cans, aluminium with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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