176. Many people think the professional sportsmen/sportswomen's behaviors on or off the field are not important as long as they are good players. To what extent do you agree or disagree with it?

Most individuals think that professional sports
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behaviors
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play any role as long as they are good players. In
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and
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conclude
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with, many
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think that behaviour does not matter at all, if a
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is playing
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.
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think that we know them
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because they play games. So, just watch them playing rather than focusing on their lifestyle.
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, many think that
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perspective of each individual is different. If someone
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their present behaviour
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, other
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other
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another
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person
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may not.
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in
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newspaper, the reality of famous personalities is very different
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their actual
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is shown
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. On the other side, some
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make them their
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. They research
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and
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every thing
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about that
person
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thing in their own
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, Virat having lots of property, many
people
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make him
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hero
of their
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and want to
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achieve
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thing in their
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, if good players have
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behaviour
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good behaviour
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good
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they can motivate common
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of
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them internationally.
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, I would say
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background matters as they are the role model of other
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person
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people
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. They can teach other
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people
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good values like sharing, teamwork, punctuality, and so on.

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Task response
Be clear about your view in the intro and keep it in every paragraph.
Coherence
Make a simple plan: intro, one paragraph for being against, one paragraph for being for, then a short final view.
Examples
Use short facts or small reasons to back up ideas and give a quick example.
Grammar
Check grammar a lot. Use correct form with words like 'behavior,' and keep 'on and off the field' clear.
Lexical
Use easy words. Do not use many big words. Keep words simple and clear.
structure
You show both sides of the issue.
position
The end gives your own view.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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