The graph below shows the types of transport used by tourists who visited New Zealand from five countries in 2004.

The graph represents the types of vehicles used by
travellers
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who went to New Zealand from five countries in 2004.
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, both of them decreased
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five countries. In
Britain
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,
travellers
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used the air just about 42 %, and
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was followed by a considerable rise to 52 % Japan, but
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dropped to 25 % in
Australia
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. The coach used by
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in
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was about 57 %, and it dropped to 35 % in Korea. Despite a slight decrease from 57 % to 35 % the usage rose considerably to 50 % in
Australia
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.
Travellers
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used cars in
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just about 28 %, and there are some mixed figures , and
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figure decreased to 20 % in
Australia
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. The ferry used by
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in
Britain
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and Germany was levelled at about 20 %, and
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was decreased to 12 % in
Australia
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