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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

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The given line chart represents information on
average
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the average
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 monthly floating cost of
copper
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,
nickel
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 and
zinc
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 in 2014.
Overall
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, the
expense
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price
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 of
zinc
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 rose steadily during the year,
while
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nickel
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 had a downward trend in 12 months. The fee change of
zinc
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 went up rapidly, approximately 1% in January to 3% in February, which was 2
times
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 more than that of
copper
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 and just less
3
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than 3
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% than
nickel
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. Following that, the figure of
zinc
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 cut down steadily from March to May
about
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by about
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 2% to 1%, which was just more
0.5
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than 0.5
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% than
copper
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. From May to June
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copper
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, copper
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 prices reached the same level of -0.5% and
was
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were
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 just over 0.5% than
zinc
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, which was 6
times
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 more than
nickel
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.
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, the charge of
copper
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,
nickel
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 and
zinc
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 consisted of 1%, -1% and 0.5% during the period from July to September, respectively.
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, the percentage change of
zinc
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 climbed rapidly by roughly 0.5% to 1% in October to November, which was 1
times
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 more than
nickel
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. Notably,
nickel
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 had fallen by 5% to 1% in 2014, which was nearly 2
times
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 more compared to other metals.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words copper, nickel, zinc, times with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rapidly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average monthly change
  • prices of metals
  • trend
  • spike
  • fluctuation
  • increase
  • decrease
  • sharp rise
  • sharp fall
  • stability
  • volatility
  • data points
  • comparison
  • contrast
  • external factors
  • influences
  • market dynamics
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