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Some people believe that a college or university education should be available to all students. Others believe that higher education should be available to only good students.

There is an opinion that a
college
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 and
university
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education
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 should be open to all
students
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, but others think that a
college
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 and
university
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education
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 should be available to only good
students
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,
while
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students
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 who come from the countryside
,
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apply
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have to get knowledge from a
university
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 or
college
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. On the one hand, some people believe that the
university
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 is only for good
students
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, because a good student has knowledge about science , and they have to
study
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 subjects without difficulty, and
also
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 before entering the
university
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, they must pass the first exam, if they pass,
then
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 they will
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 in the
university
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. A good student has their own unbelievable features that make them know the subject more than tutors.
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, more and more people think that higher
education
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 is only for good
students
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.
On the other hand
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, I believe that a
college
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 and
university
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 should be available to all
students
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, because more children should spend more time preparing to enter a
university
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 or
college
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 , but in the end, they cannot pass from exam, and they must wait a year to apply to a
university
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. Personally, I prefer a
university
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 to be available for all
students
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, because all
students
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 deserve to
study
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 in higher
education
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. In conclusion,
while
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 others think that in higher
education
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 only good
students
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 should
study
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, it could be stratification

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clarity
State your view clearly in the first paragraph and keep the same idea in the essay.
development
Add more reasons and simple examples for each side to show depth.
style
Use short, simple sentences. Break long lines into two.
coherence
Use linking words to connect ideas and give each paragraph a clear topic sentence.
structure
There is a clear plan: intro, body, and conclusion.
argument
The writer shows both sides and then gives a view.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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