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The plans below show the site of a farm in 1950 and the same site today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps illustrate the transformations of Beechwood
Farm
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 from 1950 to the present. In 1950, the
farm
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 had a layout
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 on agricultural production. There were areas for fruit trees, soft fruits, and vegetables by the river. A system of tracks connected the barn, farmhouse, and chicken area, serving as the primary routes within the
farm
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 the northeast section was dedicated to sheep grazing. Today, Beechwood
Farm
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 has undergone a series of significant changes. The tracks have been replaced by roads. Agricultural elements like the sheep area are gone. New additions include a
farm
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 shop, parking lots, a camping field with tents, holiday cottages, and solar panels. The barn has moved southwest of the farmhouse, which remains in place, as does the chicken area and the fruit-growing regions.
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, Beechwood
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 has shifted from a focus on traditional farming to a more diversified use, incorporating tourism and modern energy features
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 retaining some agricultural aspects.

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You did well to show what was on the old map and what is now. Try to add a short list of changes in order so it is easier to see.
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Use more linking words to show how ideas go from old to new or to compare them, like 'in contrast' or 'also' or 'however'.
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Keep ideas in one line when you can and use clear short sentences so your work is easy to read.
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Make sure you name all big changes, such as roads, shops, and energy parts, and say what stayed the same.
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Clear idea of old and new use.
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Good time order: 1950 then now.
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Simple word use and a friendly tone for IELTS.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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