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levels of youth crime are increasing rapidly in most cities around the world. what are the reasons for this and suggest some solitions. at least 150-180

In the present age,
If
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if
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 you turn on the TV or get news from someone, half of
them
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it
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 would be crimes
done
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committed
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 by young individuals. Many nations are witnessing
rapid
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the rapid
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 growth of offences committed by youngsters
and
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, and
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 it is
fearful
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frightening
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.
This
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 essay will look at
the
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apply
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some reasons and solutions
of
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to
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 the problem.
Firstly
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, nowadays, most youngsters tend to
playing
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play
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 video
games
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and
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, and
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 these
games
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 are mostly violent.
Sometimes
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Sometimes,
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 even they forget whether they are in real life or virtual life.
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, in the USA, shooting incidents are
observed
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apply
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mostly
done
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committed
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 by youngsters. The solution for
this
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 is that
government
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the government
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 should impose rules on
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games
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game
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 companies to reduce
playing
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the playing
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video
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of video
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games
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 and control the times communities play.
Secondly
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,
due to
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 education, a crowd of
teenage
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teenagers
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 are realising that
the
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their
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 punishment
of
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apply
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them
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apply
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are
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is
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 not the same as older would
be
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find it
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 easier than
them
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they
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.
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do.
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This
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lead
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led
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 them to commit different
kind
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kinds
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 of offences without worrying about their future.
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, in India, the punishment
on
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for
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 teenagers
have
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has
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 not
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been seriously
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seriously
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serious
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event
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even
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it
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if it
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 is rape. To tackle
of
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apply
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this
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 issue, the government should impose strict action against these
kind
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kinds
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 of offenders and should punish them.
To sum up
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, the crime rate increased a lot because of reasons like playing violent video
games
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 and
easily
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easy
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 punishment. My view is that the main responsibility lies
their
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with their
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 parents and the government.

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task response
Plan your essay with a clear view at the start. Say your main idea in one line and give two or three main points with simple support.
coherence and cohesion
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task response
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coherence and cohesion
There is a clear ending line: 'To sum up'.
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