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In some countries, health care and education are only partially funded by the government. Some people argue that the government should be responsible for covering the full cost of these services. Do you support or oppose? Give opinion.

In some countries, I
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government
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 is only spending many of money partially health care and education. The development of any country is
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 by health care and education.
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therefore
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therefore,
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 each
country
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country's
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 health care and education are only partially funded by the
government
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. But some
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apply
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people argue that the
government
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 should be responsible for covering the full
cost
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 of these
services
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. In my
opining
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opinion
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, the
government
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 can't
responsible
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be responsible
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 for covering the full
cost
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 of these
services
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. Because in that country, there are very much
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. If the full
cost
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 of these
services
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pesponsibled in
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were paid by
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 the
government
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, tax
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revenue may
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 have been increasing.
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, in my
opining
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opinion
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,
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I
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 don't support that the
government
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 should be responsible for covering the full
cost
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 of these
services
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.

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clarity
Your view is not clear. State if you agree or not, and give one main reason.
evidence
Add at least one simple example or fact to back your idea.
structure
Use a clear plan: intro with your view, 2 body parts with reasons, then a short finish.
linking
Link ideas with easy words like and, but, also, so. Use connecting words to show reasons.
organization
Make each paragraph have one idea. Start with a small sentence that tells the idea.
content
The idea of cost in health and care is a real topic.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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