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Writing Samples
Band 3.5

Is it appropriate for students and teachers to be friends on Facebook? How much do you agree or disagree with this opinion and why? Giver reasons and examples to support your answer.

Nowadays, social media has
became
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become
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 widely used
around
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apply
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worldwide. It is
very
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a very
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 important problem. Because
students
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 and
teachers
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 linking on social media like
facebook
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Facebook
show examples
 can help build a good relationship and make learning more enjoyable.
For example
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, a teacher might post helpful study tips or interesting articles that
students
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 find useful.
However
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, having
teachers
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 and
students
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 as friends on Facebook can blur the line between personal and professional life. It might make it difficult for
teachers
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 to maintain authority in the classroom.
For instance
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, if
students
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 see
teachers
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 posting personal photos or comments, it can change how
students
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 view them. Privacy is a big concern when
teachers
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 and
students
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 are friends on Facebook.
Teachers
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 may share information that should remain private, or
students
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 might share too much about their lives.
This
Linking Words
 can lead to misunderstandings or conflicts.
For example
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, a private message meant for a friend might be seen by a teacher, creating awkward situations.

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task response
Say your view clearly in the first line and end with a short wrap up.
coherence
Use simple links to show how ideas are joined (also, but, so, for example).
grammar
Fix grammar and spell common words correctly (e.g., became, worldwide).
examples
Give one or two good examples and explain them.
strength
The essay shows both good and bad sides.
strength
The writer uses some relevant examples.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • friends
  • Facebook
  • relationship
  • learning
  • comfortable
  • questions
  • ideas
  • helpful
  • tips
  • articles
  • authority
  • classroom
  • personal
  • professional
  • privacy
  • concern
  • information
  • conflicts
  • pressure
  • grades
  • treatment
  • stress
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