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Children should start formal schooling at an earlier age. Discuss the adventages and disadvantages.

In the modern era, a number of juveniles should begin formal education which ones earlier
age
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. Some
peeople
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people
 say that not only has
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apply
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pros but
also
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 cons. In
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apply
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the upside or downside
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this
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 notions.
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, one obvious negative effect of
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children
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go
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going
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 to
school
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 at an earlier
age
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Firstly
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, grouping by ability may have a negative impact on
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 learners.
Such
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 as,
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perhaps
 some children do not speak among the individuals or
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exhibit
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.
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, the majority
newborns
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of newborns
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 do not want
be
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 seen as less intelligent than
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others
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.
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Also
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 they lose motivation. So that
,
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They
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they
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 could not demonstrate an ability and concentration wavers.
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, the main
adventage
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advantage
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study
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studying at
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 an earlier
age
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 at
school
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 is
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that teacher
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teacher
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teachers
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 can plan more suitable lessons
and
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, and
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 they assist
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increase
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in increasing
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 progress.
For instance
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, educators understand each other learners
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who
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they
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apply
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do not know
lessons
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the lessons
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, skills and necessary progress.
As well as
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,
school
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 children have an
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increase
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increased
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 motivation and thirst for knowledge.
Morever
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Moreover
, they learn
apply
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 what
their
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they
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 learns and show considerable initiative among the people.
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, infants’ marked improvement
acquire
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in acquiring
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 knowledge.
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, the benefits of an earlier
age
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 education outweigh the
drowbacks
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drawbacks
 because of the fact that tutors can work at the right speed for their students
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along
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, along
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 with
prepare
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preparing
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plan
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a plan
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more
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for more
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 suitable lessons.
In addition
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,
this
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increase
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increases
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 thirst for knowledge and helps
child’s
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children
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 demonstrate an ability. In short,
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 gifted children
a
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by a
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year.

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structure
Make a clean plan. Start with a short intro and a clear view. Then have two body parts: one for bad side, one for good side. Use links like first, then, and, but.
language
Write in simple form and check big errors. Keep tense and word order clear. Use easy words and short sentences.
content
Give one clear example for each point to show you are sure. Examples help the reader see the point.
conclusion
End with a short conclusion that repeats your view. Do not add new ideas in the end.
content
You show some idea of both sides.
thesis
The essay ends with your own view.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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