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The diagram below shows the steps in the production of woolen goods.

The chart illustrates the data about the stages required for producing
woolen
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woollen
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 goods.
Overall
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, the
fundament
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in
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material in
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 making the materials
such
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 as jackets, carpets, strings and yams for knitting is the fur of sheep. The main steps are basically cleaning, drying and spinning the sheared fur, which
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then
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is then
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 continued with
specials
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special
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 steps based on the type of good. The process begins with shearing the fur of sheep, after which it is cleaned, getting rid of dirt
as well as
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 bacteria.
The next step is
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 to dry it to prevent it from the
visit
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of
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 bacteria again, which is followed by spinning.
This
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 is continued by producing
string
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a string
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 from it and
then
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 recycling
or
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, or
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 it is turned into wool. Next comes making
tuft
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a tuft
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 out of wool. Once it is made, it is
storage
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, followed by spinning and forming a ball form. Having been formed, it is given for knitting or for the production of clothes.

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