The diagram below gives information about the number of parcels delivered by two major mail services companies from 1920 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The data presented in the line graph illustrates how many
parcels
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the two main mail providers delivered between 1920 and 2000.
Overall
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, both mail services saw an increase in the number of
parcels
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delivered by the end of the period.
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,
although
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FedEx distributed more
parcels
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than
TNT
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initially
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, the
TNT
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company overtook FedEx in the final year. In 1920,
TNT
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delivered slightly over 5000
parcels
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.
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, its trend continued to increase gradually over the years and by 1980,
TNT
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had delivered over 10000
parcels
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.
After
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this
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figure, the number of
parcels
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delivered witnessed a dramatic rise, reaching almost 25000 deliveries in 2000.
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,
FedEx
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the FedEx
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company followed a similar trend. In 1920, it
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delivered 15000
parcels
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, establishing it as the top mail service provider. Two decades later, it reached its highest point at about 24800 before declining to its lowest in 1950, registering roughly 14000.
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, its trend remained relatively stable until 1960 before it began to increase again, finishing the year with just under 20000 deliveries.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words parcels, tnt with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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