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In recent years, there has been a rise in the popularity of second-hand clothing amongst the younger generation. Why is this happening? Do you think it’s a positive or negative development?

Nowadays, wearing second-hand clothing
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 widespread and popular among youth. There are many
reasons
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 that
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 habit spreads in
people
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's lives. In
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 behaviour in depth and
looking
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 for
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reasons
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the reasons
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 for
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 issue. In my point of view, it has a lot of benefits for
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 and
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environment
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the environment
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but
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 its drawbacks should be taken into consideration.
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 there are many
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 behind wearing second-hand clothing.
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younger
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the younger
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 generation highly
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believes
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 it is their duty to preserve
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environment
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environmental
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 resources for
future
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the future
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. They know that providing
clothes
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need
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requires
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the
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a
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 large amount of resources like wool, water.
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, they try to use second-hand
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 to avoid wasting
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 material.
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, it is obvious that
,
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apply
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 the cost of
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increase
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 dramatically
during
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over
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these
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the
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 years,
it
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which
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 makes youth
to
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apply
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reduce their
money spent
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spending
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 on
wearing
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clothing
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products
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 to ensure they can meet the end.
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As
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the
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a
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 result, second-hand
clothes
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 are the best option for them as they are cheaper choices. Wearing second-hand
clothes
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have
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has
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 some benefits for society and
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environment
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the environment
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. It can help
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environment
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the environment
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 by reducing the amount of resources which is used to produce
clothes
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.
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, using
second hand
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second-hand
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 can encourage
people
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 to avoid
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a consumerism
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consumerism
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 lifestyle which is
spreaded
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spread
 by social media and modern culture. It
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 has some drawbacks. Using second-hand
products
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 may cause serious skin diseases for some
people
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.
In addition
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, the quality of
products
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 is low because they were used by other
people
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 and their quality
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became
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become
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 poor.
Overall
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, in
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essay
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essay,
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 we discussed the
reasons
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of
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for
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 spreading
this
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 culture among modern society. Using these
products
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 offers
wide
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a wide
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 range of benefits for
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environment
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the environment
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. Reducing
material
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the material
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 used for cloth
products
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 is the key point.
However
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, it can have some drawbacks for consumers. It may cause some
peoblems
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problems
 for
you
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your
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 skin health
and
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, and
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lack
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a lack
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 of enough quality is
the other
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another
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 drawback

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structure
Plan first. Start with your view. Then give two or three reasons and an end line that ends your view.
grammar
Use simple, clear grammar. Check common errors: word form, plural s, and proper preps.
coherence
Make one idea in each part. Use a clear topic line for each part.
content
Give one or two real examples to show your point.
content
Your topic is clear and you show some view on the topic.
structure
You point to both good and bad sides.
coherence
You tie cost and eco talk to the theme.
Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cost-effective
  • environmental impact
  • sustainable alternatives
  • fast fashion
  • vintage
  • mainstream fashion
  • individuality
  • social media influencers
  • celebrities
  • promoting sustainability
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