The diagram below shows how fabric is manufactured from bamboo. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The given diagram illustrates the information how fabric is made from
bamboo
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.
Overall
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,
manufacturing
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the manufacturing
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of cloth from
bamboo
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takes nine steps. In these steps,
bamboo
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is
harvest
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harvested
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and processed to make
pulp
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. After
that
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that,
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that
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the
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pulp
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is filtered and softened to make yarn, which is
than
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then
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used to make clothes.
Firstly
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,
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bamboo
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the bamboo
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plant grows in
spring
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the spring
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season and
harvested
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is harvested
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in
autumn
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the autumn
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. After
harvesting
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harvesting,
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each plant is cut into pieces and
then
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crushed to make liquid
pulp
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. Long
fibers
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fibres
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from
this
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pulp
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are collected by
filteration
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filtration
.
Moreover
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, water and amine oxide are added
in
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to
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these
fibers
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fibres
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to
soft
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soften
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them.
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Then
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Then,
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soft
fibers
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fibres
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are
spin
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spun
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to make yarn.
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lastly
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Lastly
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,
this
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yarn is
weave
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woven
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to make fabric, and
then
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that fabric is used to make different wearables.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words bamboo, pulp with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • bamboo
  • fabric
  • cloth
  • fiber
  • yarn
  • thread
  • weave
  • knit
  • stages
  • steps
  • process
  • harvest
  • cut
  • crush
  • break
  • fiber
  • spin
  • weave
  • finish
  • wash
  • dye
  • color
  • soft
  • strong
  • material
  • final
  • make
  • from
  • to
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