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Writing Samples
Band 5

Should a city try to preserve its old, historic buildings or destroy them and replace them with modern buildings? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

Opinions differ regarding
weather
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whether
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 to sustain or destroy ancient
city
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buildings
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 despite their beauty.
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,
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apply
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 modern
buildings
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considered
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are considered
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 much practical and safer, destroying them wouldn't be beneficial. Preserving historical
buildings
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 benefits
outweighs
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outweigh
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 replacing them with modern constructions. One key reason is that these
buildings
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represents
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represent
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city's
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the city's
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 personal identity, history and heritage. And
this
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what
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is what
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 makes a
city
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stands
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stand
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 out from another to be picked as a travel destination
which
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, which
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 leads to local economic growth over time.
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, most visitors travel all the way to Edinburgh only
too
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to
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 see its magical historic architecture and beautiful streets. Another important point is
preserving
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that preserving
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 old
buildings
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 can increase
locals
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locals'
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 sense of belonging and emotional connection to the
city
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. Old landmarks
reminds
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remind
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 people of their roots and culture
which
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, which
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 no amount of
modernization
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modernisation
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 can remind them of
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 kind of feelings. Over time,
this
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 contributes positively to community cohesion and social
wellbeing
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well-being
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.
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, some might argue
the
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 lack of safety of old
buildings
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 compared to modern ones. In my opinion, with
a
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apply
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constant inspections, maintenance and interior
re design
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redesign
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 that match today’s modern
life
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life,
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 that
wont
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won't
 be an issue.
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, destroying old
buildings
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 and replacing them with modern ones would cost much more money and unnecessary efforts. In conclusion, preservation and
modernization
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modernisation
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 should not be viewed as opposing choices.
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, cities can restore historic
buildings
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 through regular maintenance and safety inspections,
while
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 adapting their interiors to meet contemporary needs.
This
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 balanced approach allows cities to retain their heritage without compromising safety and practicality.

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grammar
Fix grammar and word form. Use 'whether' for choice. Ensure subject and verb agree.
vocabulary
Use only easy words from the first 100. Some words here may be too hard.
structure
Put a short intro, then clear body and a short conclusion. Keep one idea per paragraph.
spelling
Check spelling of place name Edinburgh, and keep simple, plain forms.
content
Give more proof or facts for each point. This can help each point be strong.
content
The idea to keep old build is clear and the view stays through the text.
example
The essay uses a real example to show a point.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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