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Band 3

Restoration of old buildings involves enormous expenditure. Some people believe that this money should be used to build new housing structures. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Ideas only

Nowadays, many individuals believe that old
buildings
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 represent identity and traditions of
country
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the country
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,
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While
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while
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 others argue that
this
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 money
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government
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apply
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should be used
to
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for
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 new housing structures.
However
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, both
has
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have
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its
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their
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 own pros and cons. I strongly disagree with the statement. To commence with,
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government
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the government
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 should
persevered
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preserve
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 old
buildings
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 because
of
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apply
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historical
place
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places
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 attract tourists and generate
long term
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long-term
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 income. It
also
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 helps
to
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apply
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future
generation
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generations
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 understand history.
Moreover
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, Old architecture gives cities
character
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a character
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 that modern
buildings
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 often lack. It
show
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shows
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 our
culture
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cultural
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 transaction and identity.
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,
The
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the
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 forts and havelis of Jaipur have been restored, which has boosted tourism and created jobs for local people.
On the other hand
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, investing money in new housing structures is more beneficial in many cities where there is a serious shortage of homes. Building modern apartments provides safe and affordable living spaces for people, especially low-income families.
For example
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,
government
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 housing projects in large cities help people move from slums to proper homes.
Therefore
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, spending on new housing directly improves living conditions. In conclusion,
although
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 restoring old
buildings
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 helps preserve cultural heritage, I believe that
government
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 funds should mainly be used to build new housing structures, as
this
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 better addresses the urgent problem of housing shortages and improves people’s living standards.

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clarity
Make your main point clear in the start and stick to it in all paragraphs.
logical flow
Do not swap sides. If you say you do not agree, show this in all body parts.
examples
Give one good example for each idea and say why it backs your view.
grammar
Check words that are wrong for the sentence, like 'persevered' or 'Shows' and spell them right.
cohesion
Use simple words to link ideas, like 'also', 'but', 'therefore', 'however'.
structure
Keep ideas tight and do not repeat the same point again.
task response
The text shows both sides of the issue.
coherence
An example from Jaipur is used.
task response
There is a clear end to restate view.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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