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Band 2.5

Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment?

There is a constant debate on whether it is more beneficial to live in an
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appartment
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apartment
 or a house. Personally, I think
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an appartment
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appartment
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apartment
 as an
accomodation
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accommodation
 has more advantages compared to
houses
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. Admittedly, living in
houses
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 has some merit to it. Those who own or rent a house have spacious
accomodations
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accommodations
 to enjoy and relax.
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, they need not worry about noise coming from
the
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next door as the
houses
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 are
well insulated
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well-insulated
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. Needless to say
but
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, but
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 living in an
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appartment
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apartment
 is often
refered
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referred
as
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to as
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matchbox
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a matchbox
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 lifestyle because of restricted space and no privacy. But
in
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on
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contrary
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the contrary
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, condominium living gives access to a lot more leisure activities like gymnasiums, badminton courts, swimming pools, party rooms, theatre rooms, and a lot more things.
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, in countries like Canada, the management takes care of the snow removal
which
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 could be a big task for anyone owning or renting a house. Generally,
appartments
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apartments
also
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 have rent control policies which give tenants comfort and financial security during
the
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inflation.
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,
houses
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 could have advantages
but
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, but
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 the cost efficiency and comfort of
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an appartment
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appartment
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apartment
out number
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outnumbers
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its
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their
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 merits.

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grammar
Fix misspelt words and wrong forms, like apartment, referred, and accommodation. Use simple, common words.
coherence
Use easy links to make flow clear. Words like first, also, but, however, in addition help the reader follow your view.
task
Make a plan before you write. Have an intro with your view, two body parts with one idea each, and a short ending.
task
Give more full examples to back each point, such as gym, pool, and snow care, to show why flats can be better.
lexis
Keep to simple words from the top 100. Avoid big or rare words.
position
Your view is clear.
content
You show points for both sides.
structure
The end line links to your view.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • privacy
  • outdoor activities
  • gardening
  • customization options
  • renovate
  • structural changes
  • investments
  • appreciation/depreciation
  • maintenance costs
  • utility costs
  • security features
  • gated entries
  • surveillance systems
  • shared amenities
  • community centers
  • suburban
  • rural areas
  • commutes
  • urban centers
  • public transport
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