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Some people think it is better for one single legal system throughout the world. Others say countries should have their own law. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In recent years,has attracted increasing attention from the public.
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 some people believe that the better of
one
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 legal system throughout the world.
others
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Others
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 argue that the
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 of countries
have
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having their
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 own
laws
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.From my perspective,I agree with
one
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laws
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law
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 for all
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country
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countries
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 around the world. On the
one
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 hand,
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using
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one
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a
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 single
law
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 reduces the complication of
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law
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the law
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,
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 rule makes
new
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a new
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 way for companies to
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 with
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each other
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 .The reason is
all
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that all
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country
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 uses only
type
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 of
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law
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law,
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make
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making
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every thing
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everything
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 simple to
trade
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 or buy with international
cooperations
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corporations
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.
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for
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apply
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 international companies like Nike,Nestly
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have
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 more
chance
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chances
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 to
trade
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 or
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collaborate
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another
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others
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 by the
simple
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simplicity
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 of
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 legal rule.
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,
The
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the
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 simple rule makes more
chance
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chances
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 for
coperations
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corporations
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trade
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 with no borders.
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,all
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country
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countries
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 around the world
has
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have their
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tradional
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traditional
laws
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.Because the
own
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apply
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laws
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shaped
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were shaped
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 for
along
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a long
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 time by
local
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the local
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 community.
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,having
one
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 single legal
law
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bring
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is
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 harmful
for
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 local people,
they
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as they
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 have significant
traditional
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traditions
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.
Many
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 information in
one
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 single legal
do
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document does
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 not fit with each
country
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. In conclusion,
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 both views have their own merits,I believe that
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one
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a
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 single legal
law
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 for all
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country
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countries
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bring
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brings
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 more advantages,because it makes way for people
connect
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to connect
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 with no
boders
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borders
.
This
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 issue should be considered carefully in order to
archive
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achieve
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 long-term benefits for society.

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task
Plan before you write. Start with a short intro that states the topic and your view. Then give two ideas in two body parts, each with a simple example. End with a short finish that restates your view.
coherence
Use one main idea in each paragraph. Use simple linking words to show how ideas are linked to the next part.
language
Check spelling and grammar. Use easy words you know and keep to one tense.
strength
Your view is clear at the end.
strength
You show both sides of the topic.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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