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In some countries ,companies allow people to work from home.In others, pople are still expected to work in an office. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

owing to advancement in technology,the way of working has been totally changed in some nations.Few
organizations
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 permit their
employess
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employees
 to do
work
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 from their living area
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while
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 others give preference to
office
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work
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soley
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solely
 at the
office
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. I believe that the former notion is more logical and will
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explain
 both aspects
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discussing
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 the benefits of working in an
office
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 , it
is
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apply
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enhannces
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enhances
 cooperation skills and productivity for both the company and its
employees
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 as they
work
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on
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same
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the same
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time
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 and
at
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same
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the same
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 place
which
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 is designated for working .
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as a result
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 ,
employees
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 are fully energetic and can do
work
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 with more concentration without any distractions, which is not possible at
home
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, if someone working at
home
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,
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an employe
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employe
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employee
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 can not able to
complet
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complete
task
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the task
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 in
short
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a short
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time
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 because of distractions in the
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form
 of playing kids and
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the voice
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 of
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the mouse
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, which is
impossibe
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impossible
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office
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the office
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on
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On
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 the
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flip
 side , working at
home
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 is very
worthy
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worthwhile
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 as
employees
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 do not need to commute
eyery
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every
 day
so
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 it is
time
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saffer
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saver
as well as
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 money ,because
employer
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employers
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 do not need to spend
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a chuck
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chuck
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 of money to arrange
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office
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an office
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 ,paying
electercity
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electricity
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bills
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bill
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bill,
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an
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and
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 so on .
Moreever
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Moreover
,if
wokers
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workers
 are
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stress-free
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 they can
work
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 with ease and effectively.
as
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 they are spending
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 with their family
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thus
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 if
employees
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 are
happy
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happy,
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then
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work
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would
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will
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 be
succesfully
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successful
.
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for
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For
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 instance,after
covid 19
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COVID-19
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many
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, many
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companyes
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companies
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to
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employees to
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work
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 from
home
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in
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In
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conclution
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conclusion
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, workinfg
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workinfg
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working
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home
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 is more
efective
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effective
as
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apply
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campare
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compared
 to working
at
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in
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office
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the office
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task
Plan your essay. Start with a simple line that says the topic, then tell you will talk about two sides and your view.
coherence
Use clear linking words to join ideas. For example: First, Then, But, So.
grammar
Keep grammar simple. Use common words and short sentences. Check spell and form of words.
content
Give a clear example for each idea to show why it is true.
content
The writer tries to talk about both sides and gives an own view.
structure
There is a clear end that shows the view.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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