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Nowadays, maintaining healthy eqating habits is difficult. To what extend do you agre or disagree?

Nowadays, it is increasingly typical for
community
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communities
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 in various regions of the world to believe that keeping
balanced
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a balanced
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 diet is increasingly difficult. Personally, I agree with
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 viewpoint for the main reasons. First of all, a lack of time in modern society makes it challenging
individuals
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for individuals
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 to follow
a
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apply
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healthy eating habits.
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,
public
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the public
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tend
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tends
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 to skip homemade meals and consume unhealthy
cooking
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food
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 on a daily basis.
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, the easy access to fast
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cuisine
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food
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 makes it difficult for society to maintain healthy eating habits.
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, individuals prefer choosing processed
cuisine
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 because it is quick and convenient. In conclusion, I strongly agree that following good eating habits is not easy in the modern world
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 busy lifestyles and the widespread availability of junk
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cuisine
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food
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.
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, society
need
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needs
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 to be more conscious of their
cuisine
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 choices to protect their health.

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task response
Your view is clear, but you need more proof. Add one or two lines with real life examples or events to back your claim.
coherence cohesion
Link ideas so they flow well. Use simple link words and keep a clear plan: intro, two body paragraphs, then end. Fix small grammar in sentences.
strength
You show a clear view on the topic.
strength
Two main ideas are used.
strength
Some link words are used to join ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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