Some people think rapid population growth in cities only benefits people who live there while others believe that it has negative impacts. Discuss both viewsand given your own opinion.

For urban residents, the rapid
population
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growth undoubtedly brings about a lot of negative impacts. A larger urban
population
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means heavier operational pressure on cities. In most cases,urban development fails to keep pace with
this
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population
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increase, which
lead
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leads
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to numerous problems.
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, high
population
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density leads to more frequent traffic congestion, competition for high-quality job opportunities becomes increasingly fierce, and urban environmental pollution is aggravated by a large
population
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. All these issues undermine citizens’ quality of life and hinder the sound and sustainable development of cities.

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task
Add a short intro and a clear end with your view.
task
Tell both sides and give your own view.
coherence
Use easy words to link ideas and show contrast.
grammar
Fix grammar: 'which lead' should be 'which leads', and add space after comma.
vocabulary
Keep words simple and clear.
structure
Clear topic sentence and many examples.
coherence
Good use of 'For instance' to show support.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
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