Many jobs that used to be done by humans are now being done by machines. Does this development bring more advantages or disadvantages?

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believed
that
machines
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are gradually dominating humans in the job market. From my point of view, the benefits of
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development could outweigh its drawbacks
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the accuracy and safety it brings about.
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with, it is undeniable that mechanical tools are more
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beneficial
than humans in manufacturing production line
products
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. To illustrate, they provide robots, conveyor
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which help to generate exactly
products
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with the same size and quality
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, so
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that every
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products
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sold is the same.
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, it could make a better profit. As for
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, because they could not provide goods with
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accuracy
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that sometimes
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their
products
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' quality may be different, which makes consumers have
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experience when buying their
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.
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,
machines
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could prevent workers from doing
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dangerous occupations
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such
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as building
skysrapers
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skyscrapers
or working in mines. To illustrate, if people follow those jobs, they can face lots of danger, so
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mechanical tools help workers a lot in doing
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jobs.
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, nowadays,
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are gradually replacing people in some areas
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education. One of those is AI
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such
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as ChatGPT or Claude, which could harm students when they continuously use
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tools for doing their homework. In conclusion, because of the safety and accuracy
machines
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provide, they are used more and more nowadays.
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task response
Be clear on your view from the start and finish with a short end. Say if you think machines bring more good or bad.
coherence cohesion
Make one idea in each paragraph. Use easy links like first, next, also, but, however, finally to connect ideas.
language
Check word choice and spell. Use short, easy words and short sentences.
content
You talk about a real topic that many people think on.
content
You give some real examples, like robots and dangerous work.
structure
You try to give a plan with an intro and a close.
Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...
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