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Band 6.5

The diagrams represent information in Edmonton about transport and car use.

The pie chart
depict
Correct subject-verb agreement
depicts
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 the percentages of different
kids
Use the right word
kinds
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 of vehicles that
people's
Verb problem
people
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used
Wrong verb form
use
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, namely
Use synonyms
car
Fix the agreement mistake
cars
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,
LTR
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LTRs
,
bus
Fix the agreement mistake
buses
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 and
taxi
Fix the agreement mistake
taxis
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,
while
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 the table
illustrastes resons
Correct your spelling
illustrates reasons
of
Change preposition
for
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 driving
Use synonyms
car
Fix the agreement mistake
cars
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 in Edmonton.
Overall
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, it can be seen that people attached utmost importance to driving
Use synonyms
car
Correct article usage
a car
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 when they went to commute. In detail, driving
Use synonyms
car
Correct article usage
a car
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 comprised almost half of
chart
Correct article usage
the chart
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 with 45%, which was the highest portion in the chart. The second most popular vehicle choice was the light rail transit with 35%. İn addition, the use of
taxi
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taxis
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 and
bus
Fix the agreement mistake
buses
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equalled
Verb problem
was
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each other
Correct word choice
equal
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with
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at
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 10%. When we look at the table,
commute
Correct article usage
the commute
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 to work experienced the highest portion with 55%, exceeding that of the others.
Afterwards
Add a comma
Afterwards,
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 people
most
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mostly
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 drove for
businees
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businesses
 with 45%.
Moreoever
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Moreover
, taking children to school
recuded
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increased
 by %5 and reached 40%.
In contrast
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, driving for leisure activities and shopping were the same each other and made up the latest sections with 15%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words car with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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