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The diagram below shows the plans for designing a trade show floor from 2009 to 2010

Two maps depict the changes in the layout of the trade show from 2009 to 2010.
Overall
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, the trade show was expanded and created a few opportunities for visitors. The
conference
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hall
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 decreased in size,
while
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 the
exhibition
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area
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 was enlarged In 2009, the main entrance and side entrance were located at the top of the map.
Whereas
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, there was a refreshment between the two entrances.
Following
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this
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, the
conference
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hall
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 was set up with 12 seats and a stage. The meeting room was next to the
conference
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hall
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. Whilst
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 the
exhibition
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 was located in the east corner of the trade show building. A large balcony was on the outside of the building. The registration
area
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 was right next to the
exhibition
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area
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. By 2010, the
exhibition
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area
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 was relocated with a
conference
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hall
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 and was increased significantly
,
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 by adding nearly 14 display stands. The meeting room was demolished
,
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 because of the enlargement of the
exhibition
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area
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.
However
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, the
conference
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hall
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 was situated
instead
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 of past the
exhibition
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 sphere
and
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, and
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 it decreased by removing 6 seats.
On the other hand
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, the lounge was built in the
area
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 of the balcony.
Additionally
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, the refreshment and registration
area
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 swapped its place without any changes.
However
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, both entrances remained unchanged

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words conference, hall, exhibition, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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