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Some people believe that countries should produce the food to feed their population themselves and import as little as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some individuals advocate an idea that states should provide to the citizens products produced locally and reduce
import
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 as much as possible. I generally disagree with the idea of concentrating on domestically produced
food
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, many
countries
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 do not have enough internal resources to cover the
requirement
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 entirely.
Secondly
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, focusing only on the national capabilities, the nation will not be able to secure the product safety
due to
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 several possible reasons,
such
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 as floods, hurricanes, drought and the seasonal risks. There are two key ideas
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 the lack of resources and security risks will be considered in the following paragraphs.
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 with, some states have
the
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limited internal capacity of water, fertile soil or wealthy fauna. In
this
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 case, hardly ever enough to cover even the general domestic interest for
food
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 and products. As an example, Japan and South Korea have developed agriculture, meat and fish production infrastructures.
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, these states encountered the necessity of importing a wide range of products to cover internal demand
due to
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 the amount and density of population, and
lack
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 of enough space even for the
food
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 production industries with modern technologies.
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, even for
countries
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 with numerous options able to cover local
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, focusing on product independence is - risky way. Because many factors can affect the harvesting and the performance of business industries involved in the product supply chain.
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, unpredictable floods in the north regions of Kazakhstan in 2024 had a huge negative impact on local farmers. Even though insurance can save businesses faced with
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technological disasters
, these destructive events could have an irreparable impact on national
food
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 safety and stability. In conclusion, the aim of some
countries
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 to focus only on the local production of
food
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 to entirely cover an internal demand could be very risky. As an option, developing internal natural and business resources combined with the pragmatic import could be the best solution for some
countries
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structure
Add a clear plan with 3 main ideas and a short opening that states your view.
content
Build each idea with more detail and show how it backs your view.
language
Check spelling and word use; fix mistakes like desasters and technogenical.
coherence
Use more link words to show contrast and flow between ideas.
structure
You show a clear view in the opening and end.
content
You use real life examples to back ideas.
perspective
The end gives a plan that mix local work with imports.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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